One thought on “Stare At the Smiling Sky

  • December 18, 2017 at 5:50 pm
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    Really like that title. You do an excellent job with the father/daughter dynamic which only heightens the horror of the disappearing plane. Description is really strong in this piece and, as in your last few, you seem to be gaining real confidence in your writing ability. Curious to see where this goes!
    You want “led” here: It lead to a hangar that had fallen in on itself. Here you want a period between sentences: “You’ve told me enough about this over the phone, I don’t need to read any more about it.” Comma after date: “Note the date.” he
    instructed. Period between: We just didn’t come across well, people thought
    we were crazy.

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